Essay Review

After reading your comments on my essay, I have finally come to terms with the fact that fancy language and sentence strucutre does not impress. Especially when one interferes with the meaning and conveyance of one's message. This has been a problem of mine: the inability to simply and directly, without ambiguity, declare my stance on an issue. With this said, I also believe this essay was a step in the right direction for me. For I believe it was an original idea that was sufficiently examined and explained within the context of what I had read up to that point. Going on, I will endeavor to make my complex sentiments clear and succinct in order to attain maximum efficiency and meaning in my writing.